Ingredients - my published haiku, tanka, haibun and the occasional piece of writing that fits none of those categories.
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Alison - this is so good. I wonder, however, if the word "disturbing" possesses too heavy an imprint of the author. might "shuffling" or "rustling" work?an oldie:recently divorced --still reachingfor the ring
You may have a point there, thanks. But 'shuffling' or 'rustling' seem too light somehow. I'll have a think about it.
Thanks! I liked the pivot/double meaning too, but it might be too 'telling' for some tastes.
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Alison - this is so good. I wonder, however, if the word "disturbing" possesses too heavy an imprint of the author. might "shuffling" or "rustling" work?
an oldie:
recently divorced --
still reaching
for the ring
You may have a point there, thanks. But 'shuffling' or 'rustling' seem too light somehow. I'll have a think about it.
Thanks! I liked the pivot/double meaning too, but it might be too 'telling' for some tastes.
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