Poetry should be as simple as possible, but no simpler (as Einstein may have almost said)
I love this!I would humbly suggest some editing.I really love the title, and can't decide on your original wording or...Losing hold of an angel's tailIt never lifted me too high,an inch at the most.It was just a lightness,a welcome counterbalanceto relentless gravity.I didn't realise it makes it tanka like, as that is an irrelevance, as the poem is just darned good.My edited version is just a thought, so shoot me down with a banana umbrella! ;-)
Thanks! Will ponder the editing suggestions which look good.
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