Monday, April 27, 2009

strange rooms
and forking paths
in my dreams
I deliberately
lose myself

3 comments:

Alan Summers said...

Excellent tanka!

I really like the first line, great intro into the poem!

Also nice very subtle use of a pivot line.

all my best,

Alan
The With Words Competition 2009.

Paul Smith said...

I fully agree with Alan, this is a wonderful tanka with plenty of space within it to wander freely.

jem said...

Nice one. I like the idea that in waking hours we try to find ourselves, only to do the opposite at night.